In the spirit of NaNoWriMo I’m not going back and editing the stuff I’ve written. No time for re-writes. However, I am going back and re-reading it (to keep consistent) and to see how I well or badly I think I did certain bits.
There’s one bit I’m pleased with so far (yes, I know, early days). In the first major conversation of the story one guy is doing a lot of talking and is clearly agitated. Twice I went to write “so and so, clearly agitated” and stopped myself, and instead, I wrote these.
Philip sat down again, clasping and unclasping his hands.
Philip stood, and then sat down again almost immediately.
… his hands returned to gripping his knees tightly.
Hopefully I got the show don’t tell bit right.