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NaNoWriMo: Day 1 update 3

In the spirit of NaNoWriMo I’m not going back and editing the stuff I’ve written.  No time for re-writes.  However, I am going back and re-reading it (to keep consistent) and to see how I well or badly I think I did certain bits.

There’s one bit I’m pleased with so far (yes, I know, early days).  In the first major conversation of the story one guy is doing a lot of talking and is clearly agitated.  Twice I went to write “so and so, clearly agitated” and stopped myself, and instead, I wrote these.

Philip sat down again, clasping and unclasping his hands.

Philip stood, and then sat down again almost immediately.

… his hands returned to gripping his knees tightly.

Hopefully I got the show don’t tell bit right.